Autumn Troiku

Carpe Diem Weekend-meditation #3 – Troiku

on the river
lights float to the horizon
the dead rejoice

And here is my attempt at a Troiku based on Basho’s haiku

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on the river
autumn leaves sail downstream
yellow boats

lights float to the horizon
drifting with the current
fallen leaves

the dead rejoice
in the change of seasons
earth lies fallow

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kim881 says:

September 24, 2017 at 1:46 pm

I love those yellow leaf boats, Candy, and the drifting lights. I like the way the last line moves to a minor key: ‘earth lies fallow’.

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1. Candy says:
  
  September 24, 2017 at 2:04 pm
  
  Thanks ,Kim 😊
  
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Chèvrefeuille says:

September 24, 2017 at 6:50 pm

Well … this is an excellent Troiku Candy. It reads like a short story, well done!

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1. Candy says:
  
  September 24, 2017 at 8:11 pm
  
  Thanks so much!
  
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  1. Chèvrefeuille says:
    
    September 27, 2017 at 11:49 am
    
    My pleasure
    
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jazzbumpa says:

September 25, 2017 at 1:05 pm

You have captured the spirit of autumn.

Namaste,
JzB

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ms pie says:

September 26, 2017 at 4:59 pm

how beautiful to see autumn unfold as n your troiku

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