Jisei

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Grace, over at d’Verse poets, challenged us to write Jisei, Japanese death poems
These are my attempts (shrug)

outside the window
dove calls to feathered mourners
my eyes slowly close
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my journey over
rocky trail to the peak
heaven waits

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  2. No need to shrug – these are very good attempts. I’ve noticed you have a preference for the brief forms and Japanese forms, so you’re an expert at conveying or suggesting a lot with just a few words.

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  3. I like the acceptance of death as alluded to this line: dove calls to feathered mourners

    These short forms are quite tricky, smiles ~ Thanks for joining us at D’verse ~

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  9. No shrugging necessary…these are very good. I like the last line of the first one where the eyes slowly close. Gives a feeling of a very peaceful passing. The second one reflects on a life of perhaps hardship over rocky terrain and then heaven is waiting. I really enjoyed both of these…well done!

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