Carpe Diem Universal Jane #13 Sijo the Korean poem

Sijo is traditionally composed in three lines of 14-16 syllables each, totaling between 44-46 syllables. A pause breaks each line approximately in the middle; it resembles a caesura but is not based on metrics.

Here is my attempt at this form

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a gentle breeze blowing through dry reeds sang a mournful song
and the nightingale answered with a hopeful melody
young lovers heard neither making, instead, their own sweet music