long black arms
keeping rhythm
squeak,flop
squeak, flop
squeak, flop
trying vainly to
wipe away the
falling raindrops
on our windshield
as we count the miles to home
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IMAGE-ine: d’Verse – Meeting The Bar
Victoria has challenged us to write a poem in the style of imagism
rhymeswithbug 
I like this so much I read it 3 times. Even though your image is that of something rhythmic, you did not fall into the monotony of the metronome. A clear, concise description. 🙂
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Thanks much, Mish!
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Love the “long black arms/keeping rhythm” and the repeated “squeak, flop.” We can only hope that those blades keep up their duty when it’s raining.
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Thanks. We had a 4 hr ride home in the rain today. Plenty of time to contemplate the wipers 😉
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Yes you did. Those wipers can either be a nice, smooth swipe or a creaky, draggy one which can kind of drive you crazy. 😉
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OMG..! thanks so much!
i keep hoping to remember
to change the year and
a half blades out
on my
2 0 1 4
Honda
Civic
EX
Coupe..
aLL Blue
Onyx..
with
raindrop
smears
blocKing
storm View..
ha! maybe
you saved
my life..
with
juSt
aN
iMageRy
poem..;)
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Go change those wipers!! 😉
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SMiLes.. ‘Almost’.. On my way..;)
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I like everything about this–I could see and hear just what you gave us and felt the anxiety of wanting to get home.
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Thanks so very much!
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or as my son named them winscreeper wipes!
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The imagism of this gives me so much more… the feeling of that dreary trip… I get the feeling that there is not really a good journey at all… Great one.
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Thanks. It was rainy 4hr trip from Germany to Belgium. Plenty of time to contemplate the wipers
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Sometimes there is much said in the white space. Your pause before “as we count the miles to home” is brilliantly placed. Excellent work!
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Thanks 😊
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YES.
Perfection.
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Thanks much!
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Brilliant! Perfect image!
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thank you so much!
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You are welcome 🙂
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